They came to a clearing in the rubbish. Carefully poured and detailed cement lined the floor surrounding a body of pool water. The pool water emitted a blue fluorescence and a muffled droning from below it’s own surface.© S.D. McKinley, 2020
The water cast a verse in the form of refracted and dancing light patterns determined by second hand inspiration from some carefully selected song, lining up in significance with time and space. The song was sung in place of a message, indueful of irony and when it spoke it did so not with words or singing voice but as if being instigated by a rogue divinity looking for low hanging fruit to nab and dabble with on it’s way toward a downward spiral of divine destruction. Like an insidious plan with the intention to instill a becoming truth and to pass the blame for something gone terribly wrong. The darkness trickled down and along with its counterpart, lifted this breath of song, bleeding itself into the spaces in between where light once shone, in perfect tune and never doubtful for its future and in turn stoically devoured places once held by brilliancy and integrity.© S.D. McKinley, 2020
- Do you like this style of writing? Is there anything that breaks your perspective of “not knowing you are reading”?
- If this was a passage in a book and the whole book was in this style of writing ( assuming the plot is well ) would you like it or would it turn into “heavy reading” for you?
- “indueful” isn’t in the dictionary, but I thought it fit perfect with the words. Did you notice that while you read it?
- Do you feel like “lining up in significance with time and space” instead of “that lined up in significance with time and space” switched tense?
- If this passage was carefully broken up with action and dialog, would it’s significance or flow be degraded and the feeling and message be lost?
Let me know what you think as a topic for discussion. After all, it is your opinion. -S.D. McKinley