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Composition: They Came to a Clearing in the Rubbish.

“Blue Ripple” by basegreen is licensed under CC BY-NC-ND 2.0

They came to a clearing in the rubbish. Carefully poured and detailed cement lined the floor surrounding a body of pool water. The pool water emitted a blue fluorescence and a muffled droning from below it’s own surface.

© S.D. McKinley, 2020

The water cast a verse in the form of refracted and dancing light patterns determined by second hand inspiration from some carefully selected song, lining up in significance with time and space. The song was sung in place of a message, indueful of irony and when it spoke it did so not with words or singing voice but as if being instigated by a rogue divinity looking for low hanging fruit to nab and dabble with on it’s way toward a downward spiral of divine destruction. Like an insidious plan with the intention to instill a becoming truth and to pass the blame for something gone terribly wrong. The darkness trickled down and along with its counterpart, lifted this breath of song, bleeding itself into the spaces in between where light once shone, in perfect tune and never doubtful for its future and in turn stoically devoured places once held by brilliancy and integrity.

© S.D. McKinley, 2020
  • Do you like this style of writing? Is there anything that breaks your perspective of “not knowing you are reading”?
  • If this was a passage in a book and the whole book was in this style of writing ( assuming the plot is well ) would you like it or would it turn into “heavy reading” for you?
  • “indueful” isn’t in the dictionary, but I thought it fit perfect with the words. Did you notice that while you read it?
  • Do you feel like “lining up in significance with time and space” instead of “that lined up in significance with time and space” switched tense?
  • If this passage was carefully broken up with action and dialog, would it’s significance or flow be degraded and the feeling and message be lost?

Let me know what you think as a topic for discussion. After all, it is your opinion. -S.D. McKinley

By S.D. McKinley

S.D. McKinley lives in the suburbs of Atlanta, Georgia. He was born in the first half of the 1980's and grew up in Wisconsin as a young boy, then moved to Georgia when he turned exactly twelve years old. During teenage years, he raced dirt track go karts and played guitar. He discovered his current love for all kinds of art after his mid-life crisis at 25 years old. S.D. McKinley began writing books in 2017.

5 replies on “Composition: They Came to a Clearing in the Rubbish.”

“Lining up in significance” didn’t seem like it switched tenses because “lining” is not the main verb. “Cast” is. I like the imagery here, but I had to read everything twice because there were so many unusual words . . . fancy words, I guess. I speak more plainly.

Priscilla, first off thanks for the recent follow and comment. I think what you are saying brings up a great topic. I’ve been doing some heavier reading at times lately and I have to read it twice as well. 😁 I would have to say that if the “pace” of a whole book was like this it would get old pretty fast.

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